More background on the Jabberwock

^ He was called as Ohmlod and was known as a myrmidon for the government fighting injustice. Of course he was not a Thessalian he would be ancient if he was. But he was incredibly loyal to the government until the regime change that brought corrupt leaders that demanded his fealty. ^

How does this excerpt flow?

Partial paragraph

"The Jabberwock collects himself and tries to stand to his feet. He slips in the wet leaves as he attempts to get his feet underneath himself, so he tries again. This time he has more success and is able to stand. The foliage is wet and the air is cool in the morning light. He looks down to see the golden stone that he had tripped upon. It was partially covered in the wet leaves."

A brief look back.

"A fortnight ago the men had chased him from the city and he had lost them during the first night of the hunt. But the men were persistent and had picked up his trail a couple of times during the last two weeks. It was surprising that the men had followed him so far from the city's gates. So the Jabberwock kept moving and was becoming exhausted"

New entry to "The Jabberwock"

"As the Jabberwock lies on the ground, stunned by his fall, he remembers back to when he first came to this country. It was a time when he was accepted, liked, even loved. Now he is hunted. And tripping over a stone wasn't helping the situation."

Spark any ideas to contribute?

Let me know.

Jabberwock's back story

Ok I've linked to my Google Docs "The Jabberwock" so anyone can view the entire story pretty easily.

I've received a couple of ideas for what's next for The Jabberwock...I wouldn't mind a couple more...so let's see some comments.

I think we will need to create a back story for The Jabberwock.

Who/What/Why/How about The Jabberwock. I look forward to hearing your ideas!

Second Story: "Earthbug and man" starts with a poem.

The Earthbug and man..

have one thing in common..

they both have eyes to see the bird in the sky..

but only one runs in fear.

What happens to the Jabberwock???

Well we know that he falls on his head. What happens next?

Does he die?
Does he get back up and continue his lonely walk?
Does he pick up the golden stone?
Does he enter a coma?

Do you have an idea for the Jabberwock? Let me know.

First Story: "The Jabberwock" starts with a poem.

The Jabberwock walks alone.

He trips on a golden stone.

He turns to see what it was....

And falls on his head.